Intro. Me and my Cousin and my brother and sister went Rainbows end.
In the morning i got ready to go rainbows end and pack the food and then we went to get my cousins and then went to rainbows end and then when we left it was cold in the car so i put a warm jacket on and it was warm so i lifted it on in to i got to the rainbows end and then when i got there i took it off because my brother wanted it because he was cold and i wasn't cold but then when we got in the bumper boats and i got cold because the water made me so cold and i wanted to get out.
so i went back to have chicken and it was nice and then i had a drink of juice and then i left the table i went on the invader and it was not that scare but then i went on the gold rush can then and then went through and mountain and it had scarce things at the bottom of the mountain like blood and skeleton and then ride was finished and then went on the stratosfear and it gave me a headache and my head got sore a then i went on the go kart and it was so fun.
Kia ora Travis,
ReplyDeleteThanks for writing about your experience of going to Rainbow's End and having fun with your cousins. I enjoy spending time with my family too. I like how you added an image. Next time you do some writing you could do it in slides and have one image on each slide.
Mrs Krausse
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ReplyDeleteHi Travis,
ReplyDeleteI am a Yr 8 student from St Bernadette's school. It must have been real fun experience at Rainbows End, also spending time with your family.
Be sure to refrain from keep using the word: "And then" and try using words such as: "First, Second, Third, etc."
Next time could you add images of yourself at Rainbows end?
Thanks!